feedback please on design #28686254 and #28686255 , regards

please check my design #28686349 and feedback on my design. Regards

Hello,
would be great to know your feedback on my design #28700365 just to check if I'm on the right track.
If you don't like entries please just eliminate them outright or leave unrated (low rating 1-3 stars damages designers overall rating).
Thanks for understanding and good luck with the project.