Sir please check my design #28408333 and feedback please. Thank you.

Dear Honorable Sir,

Have a great day.

possible feedback on my design #28441000 would be much-appreciated .

I hope you'll love my concept.

Please don't be hesitate to ask for revision if you need any changes.

Regards.

(In case if you don't like my concept, Just let me know I'll go with a different approach)