I tried my best to create this logo..expecting your review and if possible please rate my design. Have a nice day

Possible feedback on my entry would be much appreciated.
Thanks. 

Hi Sir/Ma'm

Please check my design concept (#24033190), and give me your feedback on it.

Thanks

Dear owner,
We have submitted one design. Please let us know if this is what you had in mind, feedback, rate, and let us know what you'd eventually modify. Thanks in advance.